What do you think of these horse poems can I imporve them?

The morning ride





In the morning horses ride side by side


They know there out for there morning ride


The dew will shimmer on the glass


The sun will rise and begin its pass


The air is fresh and crisp and clean


You have to know the feel to get what I mean


We climb the rough ‘n’ rocky hill


And in the forest all is still


Two bays and three greys canter in time


As we make our way through the pine


Jesters smooth trot


And eyesores canter


They seem to have a breath taking stride


Oh what a glorious morning ride





One


I climb on his back, coat a glissnen


And then I sit up high and listen


I hear the magpie’s feeble cry


My horse gives a sigh


I give a nudge with my polished boots


“Walk on” I say with a voice that suits


And gladly does my horse do so


Then move on up to a trot of high and low


The horse seems to sense seems to know


That I am more that willing to GO GO GO!


We make a canter


Then I realise


This time I see


The horse and I r1

What do you think of these horse poems can I imporve them?
i like the first one the most. in the first line change 'ride' to a different word since you use it again in the next line. lines 3 %26amp; 4 are future tense but then the next lines are present. didnt care for line 6. good though.





the second one is ok. change line 9 into two separate lines, "the horse seems to sense" "he seems to know". the last line is kinda corny.
Reply:there both good but the morning ride was my favorite.
Reply:Hey! I have to say


you wrote some good poems today.
Reply:aw i like the second one best but both are very nice and i got excited thinking about being out under the sun on my horses back looking at the beautiful sky! *sigh* =)
Reply:the first one is the better one . GREAT! job!





keep it up!



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